Korea War

Korea War

The introduction gives a lot of background concerning the topic. The introduction, however, fails to give the necessary background. It should have focused more on the intention of the fighters. The reasons why they for family reasons or their loyalty to the country.
The introduction offers a thesis. Movies give spectators stronger impressions than novels and poems because movies include images as well as words.
The writer is headed to an analytical argument. He/she is trying to concentrate on the implications of the things people do with different intentions from the obvious and expected ones. He/she puts emphasis on the two characters who engage in war in defense of their country. As it enfolds out, they are fighting for the loyalty of their family.
The writer tries to focus on one central idea but hardly accomplishes this by the end of each paragraph. A solution to this is engaging every paragraph to each new idea. In case other ideas emerge before the main idea is exhausted, it would be appropriate to first finish the main idea. This would result in short paragraph but which are detailed and precise.
The writer has not focused entirely on all possible evidence. He/she should indicate why the characters emphasized on protecting the family bonds and continuity while ignoring their loyalty to the country. He/she should also have indicated what the two powerful countries (United States and Soviet Union) did in Korea to result in the war.
The concluding paragraph does not stress the significance thesis. The writer ought to show how this movie will create a better impression than reading novels or other written materials.
The movie therefore shows how valuable family ties are and the detrimental effects of civil warto a family setup.
The essay was worth reading for it has emphasized how worthy family members and relationship are considered.
Yes there are errors. For example on page four, the first paragraph, sentence four. It’s written: One soldier in the film mentions that [in the past] we”fought against Japan to save our country, but what this one is for?”
He/she uses three sources but does not use them effectively. This can be observed in the second sentence, second paragraph two of the first page. The correct format ought to be:”After increasing incidents along the 38^th, conflict erupted in June 1950 as North Korea invaded South Korea to topple over the regime and to unify the Peninsula leadership under its Communist”