Write a paper that analyzes Wen’s focus on “transactions” and explain how the changing political and economic forces at play in China during the 1990s and 2000s forms

Please help me edit and re-write some parts of this paper. There are many language errors.It would be nice if you edit depends on my teacher’s comment. I want you to enrich the introductory paragraph and re-write the third body paragraph since the analysis is weak there. You may change the thesis of the third body paragraph. Currently the paper receives a C grade. I expect an A grade paper.

instructor’s requirement of paper:
EWRT 1B
Spring 2015
Paper #2; Writing about Short Stories: Zhu Wen’s “The Boat Crossing”

Write a paper that analyzes Wen’s focus on “transactions” and explain how the changing political and economic forces at play in China during the 1990s and 2000s forms the basis of Wen’s story telling techniques, narrative subjects, or characters, among other possible focusi.

Provide a compelling title to your essay.
Provide an introduction that includes all of the following:
Broad context
The author’s full name and one or two details about him.
The book’s full title, the short stories’ title, and the date of publication
A sense of the main events and/or character of the story.
A suggestion about what the thematic intention might be, or seems to be.
A sense of your “opinion” of the story–which could be conveyed very simply, for instance via an adjective, or by a fuller explanation up to a couple of sentences.
A thesis that isolates out two-four components of the story and makes claims about those components that will be fully examined in your paper.
At least three substantial body paragraphs, each of which focus on a specific claim about the story you are making.
Ample cited evidence which is well chosen to help you defend your claims about the story, its intention, audience, overall point, and more subtle aspects.

PROOFREAD: A 1B paper should be free of serious grammatical errors, typos, punctuation errors, and other language usage errors. Please proofread at least three times before you submit your work to be graded.

OVERALL REQUIREMENTS: I am looking for a thoughtful analysis, that shows that you have benefitted from the many classroom discussions, and have taken notes, and recorded key words and concepts that will strengthen your examination of the story. Do not “retell” the story, but do refer to the story in quite specific terms when you are intending to demonstrate something about it.

TAKING THE AUTHOR’S PERSPECTIVE: It is often helpful to think of your analysis as a way to reverse engineer the story and detect Wen’s intention and methods. Perhaps even use the author’s name frequently, such as this sentence: Wen uses ______in order to emphasize____. Wen’s protagonist is described _______ in order to convey_____. The idea to is to “notice” something and then to speculate (persuasively) why the author used the technique he did.
SOURCES OTHER THAN THE STORY: You may use outside sources, such as short articles about social transformation in China during the shift to capitalism, or articles about Wen’s filmmaking and other fiction, or other short stories in the book, or information about the status of the arts in China today, and the continued barriers to free expression (such as the imprisoning of the artist Ai Wei Wei).

WHEN WRITING ABOUT FICTION:
The elements of fiction that most often trigger analytical engagement are the following:

Characters

Setting

Tone/ Style of writing:

Structure

Plot

Narrative Voice and Point of View of the narrator

Central Conflict

Language

And all of the above are generally used in the service of THEME.

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