comment on the draft :
I am going to strongly encourage you to read and study the power point presentations about how to write an introduction and general tips on essay, because your introduction is not an introduction. Re-read the instructions for this paper. I see too that again you are at times plagiarizing, you MUST use quotation marks if those are not your words. When reading your paper I have the sense that it is a collage of ideas, it makes little sense. Rework your structure and ideas.
Work on your writing skillsuse synonyms, maybe a few specific technical film terms, etc.
Your final version will be 700-800 words/about 3 pages double-spaced. Times Roman, 12 font, regular margin [yours are not the standard size margin]. The final version will not only be a cosmetic revision, but will show an effort to improve your draft taking into consideration the suggestions, add details, analysis, as well as improvement of your writing skills.
Last Completed Projects
| topic title | academic level | Writer | delivered |
|---|